Doing sports is essential for young people
07.03.2020
Doing sports is essential for young people
В предлагаемом образцовом эссе (ЕГЭ, английский язык) содержится 189 слов.Introduction
Sport plays an important role in modern life. However, some people think that doing sports is not necessary for teenagers. Others consider it to be obvious that taking part in regular sports training and competitions are significant for them.
Main body
I entirely agree with the second opinion. There are two main reasons for that. Firstly, if teenagers are not actively engaged in doing sport, they will have time and energy to spare and with parents working long hours, they will join a criminal group and get in trouble. Secondly, sport is beneficial socially. While training and taking part in competitions, teens make friends and strengthen their friendships.
Opposing opinion
On the other hand, some people disagree. They argue that it is not necessary for teenagers to do sport, because they can do other physical activities such as dancing, gardening or jogging.
Counter-argument(s)
I do not agree with the above opinion because besides being a physical activity sport can help teenagers to build a character and to be disciplined. This is beneficial for their future life and future career.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I wholly agree with the opinion that it is necessary for teenagers to be actively involved in sports training and competitions. It is beneficial for their social behaviour and their interaction with other people.
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Комментарий.
Сочинение легко читается, аргументация ясная и понятная, экзаменационные требования выполнены. Единственным недостатком можно назвать длинное и немного запутанное предложение, которое начитается со слова «Firstly» (в главной части). Предложение не содержит лексических или грамматических ошибок, но его следует разбить на более короткие и более простые предложения.
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